Task 1.2

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

            The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

             The bar charts compare the number of British females and males in further education in three periods. It can be seen from the charts that the number of females and males who had been full – time education was higher than who had part – time education.

            In 1970-1971, around 1000 males studied full - time, compare to 700 females studied. However, after that, the number of females who studying full – time rose considerably and was higher than that of males. This figure for the period 1990/91 increased to just over 1100 people. In contrast to female, the number of males was smaller by approximately 300 people. Otherwise, a rise in the figure for males and females who had part – time education can be observable at the same periods. In 1970 – 1971, there were nearly 100 males in British, while only 30 females. Nevertheless, the number of females studying part - time grew quickly and finally, this figure was equal to the number of males..   

            In conclusion, there was a steady increased in the number of female who had education, whether part – time or full – time education through three periods in British.

Words: 190    

Model answer 1:

            This is a bar chart of the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods. In 1970, most of men were studying part-time but from 1980, studying part-time as decreased and studying full-time was increased and in 1990, it was twice as many students as in 1970. On the other hand, women studying full-time were increased and not only full-time, part-time also were increased. In 1990, studying full-time was three times as many students as in 1970. If compare Men and Women, as you see, in 1970, Men were studying more than women full-time or part-time but it changed from 1980 and then, in 1990, Women were studying part-time more than Men and studying full-time was same number.

            It shows you women has a high education now.

(132 words)

EXAMINER’S EXPLANATION

Band 5

 “The length of the answer is just acceptable. There is a good attempt to describe the overall trends but the content would have been greatly improved if the candidate had included some reference to the figures given on the graph. Without these, the reader is lacking some important information. The answer is quite difficult to follow and there are some punctuation errors that cause confusion. The structures are fairly simple and efforts to produce more complex sentences are not successful.”

Model answer 2:

            According to this graph, the number of men and women in farther education in Britain shows that following pattern.

            In the case of male, the number of male has declined slightly from about 100 thousands in 1970/71 to about 850 thousands in 1990/91. However, this figure rose back to about 850 thousands in 1990/91 from about 820 thousands in 1980/81. The proportion of full-time education has declined during this period. However, the proportion of part-time education has increased dramatically.

            On the one hand, in the case of female, the number of both full-time education and part-time education has increased during the period.From about 700 thousands in 1970/71, these figures rose to about 820 thousands in 1980/81, to about 1100 thousands in 1990/91. In terms of full-time education, this figure rose by about 260 to about 900 in 1990/91.

            On the other hand, with respect to part-time education, this figure rose dramatically between 1980/81 and 1970/71. However this figure rose slightly between 1980/81 and 1990/91.

 (165 words)

EXAMINER’S EXPLANATION

Band 6

“The candidate has made a good attempt to describe the graphs looking at global trends and more detailed figures. There is, however, some information missing and the information is inaccurate in minor areas. The answer flows quite smoothly although connectives are overused or inappropriate, and some of the points do not link up well. The grammatical accuracy is quite good and the language used to describe the trends is well-handled. However, there are problems with expression and the appropriate choice of words and whilst there is good structural control, the complexity and variation in the sentences are limited.”

Model answer:

            The bar chart shows the number of people in Britain who took a further education in both a full-time and part-time. Over three decades, in general, there was an increase in the number of women following full-time and part-time of further education and in the number of men continuing full-time education.

            As can be seen in the chart, in the first decade, the number of women is lower than the number of men for the two types of education, but in the last decade, the number of women is higher than that of men especially for the part-time education. The number of men studying the part-time education tends decrease from about 1 million in the first period to over 800 thousand. The other interesting figure is that the number of women studying full-time education rose sharply from under 100 thousands in 1970/1971 to just under 200 thousands in 1980/1981, then the increase was stable.

            In a nutshell, the growth of the number of women who took further education is higher than that of men.

Words: 160

Band: 7